melodicatastrophe

I really liked this, though I agree with Tess, much of the poem's rhyming was quite forced. Forced rhyming always does no good for the poem's flow in reading, especially ...

9/10 haha, hard to say out loud. but cute!

8/10 It's unusual. Me likey =)

Welcome to the Yound Writers' Society! I was a new member not long ago, so if you need anything PM me. I look forward to reading your work! Mel

Ahh, I can't believe I wrote that long crit and it got deleted =( Anyways, I'll write a shortened version of it. If you want the longer version, I'll rewrite ...

I did not like this very much. It was short, uninteresting, and I'm not going to remember it in five minutes, much less tomorrow. I'm not trying to be harsh ...

Thanks for the reviews/crits, everyone. =D I'll be revising this poem and posting up a new version - but more critiques are welcome =) Mel

Elm

and she says she's okay really, she's alright- and image of a broken star hangs above her head, a halo; self-pity is no longer a fight because there is no ...

Save Ferris, you're leaving us all confused..

I must say, this poem was over-ridden with over-used cliches and choppy sentences. That's what I read...just sentences. The lines in this poem made no affect of me at all, ...

Welcome, Mag =) I'm fairly new myself, but if you need any help or critiques you can PM me..I'm always online haha Mel

these memories are haunting me. some black and white, some color as menancing as no other reality in my wake. voices so much louder than ever before- repeating those daunting ...

melodicatastrophe-- "Catastrophe" is indeed an apt title for this rubbish. Your verse grates at every rhyme with all the grace of a seven-foot three year old. From what else i ...

Thanks for the reviews! I'll be sure to work on it, and maybe post the new revised edition.