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Cute. I do like this. I agree with you when you say the third stanza is off a bit, but I'm sorry, I have no suggestions for you. Just one ...

Oh, I love this! It's always so cool and fascinating when somebody is able to take something (like fire) and describe it perfectly. I especially like it when people can ...

You were right. This was slightly confusing to read, but almost liked it, because that's how life is sometimes. I didn't find anything grammatically wrong with it, although I would ...

This is extremely beautiful. I really have no nitpicks or complaints for it. It drew me in right away, and made me want to keep reading. Very, very well written. ...

Alone in the yard Lying on the grass Soft and cool beneath me Staring up at the clouds Streaks of white on a blue canvas A tree stands off to ...

Wow, this is really, really good. I love the whole childhood happiness feel of it. Especially for being your first poem, this is very well written. I just have a ...

This is really good! This is my favorite part. And, why are the senses trusted so when all they do is deceive? Because all they know cannot be defined. Mainly ...

This is just a super-quick poem that got rid of my writer's block a couple days ago. Any and all comments welcome! Lying in an pool of water, floating in ...

This is actually pretty good. Although, one thing I would suggest on changing would be the title. When I first clicked on it, I thought it was going to be ...

This is one of the first creepy/dark poems I have written, so I am not sure how it turned out. This actually was kind of based off a line from ...

An ancient track Winding its way up a mountain Rusted rails, rotten wood Weeds reaching up to choke it An abandoned station The clamor of passengers long since lost Baggage ...

My God, why have You forsaken me? When I stumble on a twisted path of darkness, I feel as though all hope has left me, And that is when You ...

Short and sweet. Absolutely loved this. Sometimes the simplest poems are the ones that turn out to be the best, and this is one of them. Just one suggestions: add ...

This is something I wrote a little over a year ago. I wasn't into writing poetry at that point, so I don't remember why I wrote this. Anyway, the only ...

Well, this poem most definitely made me never want to abuse a toy again! Talking about monsters eating a bear from the inside, and the bear's heart being already gone....really ...