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Wow. If this isn't a cliffhanger story, I don't know what is! :) You drew me in right away, and kept me all the way through it! Great job!

This seems like it could be an interesting story. Some technicality things: there was a sudden up bring of the infamous unicorns. Did you mean a sudden upbringing? the world ...

Pretty good. The beginning started out alright, but then I started to get confused towards the end. The officers also didn't seem that realistic. Like, shouldn't they have asked more ...

I will agree with all of the comments/suggestions so far. I loved reading this. It's a good write that really drew me in very quickly. I could easily imagine it ...

Hello, BlueAfrica, I think I can answer your question. People are cutting off sharks' fins to make shark fin soup, which is a delicacy in places such as Asia (can ...

I really like it, except it doesn't seem to have much a rhythm to it, does it?

This helped me a lot. Now I can get past just generalizing on my characters in my books and actually get to know them! Although, I am pretty horrible at ...

I saw just a couple grammatical errors that I believe several people pointed out, so I will just briefly mention them. To vs. Too Lute vs. lute (is that supposed ...

Thank you, thank you, thank you. This helped a lot with my writing. I now know what I should do when I get stuck!

Oh. My. Gosh. That was the most sincere, heartfelt, beautiful thing I have every read. You wrote about sincere love, without adding anything that made it seem cheesy. Amazing work! ...

Wow. This is like one of those books that I pick up because it looks interesting, and I can't put it down until I stop reading it! This is an ...

I am lovin' this so far! This is one story I would definitely keep reading! (despite the fact that I like fiction books)

Wow. Such a heartfelt, touching song. Wish I could hear the tune. A few blips in the sense of rhythm, but since it is a song, I don't think it ...

Good poem! I'll agree with everyone else in saying the rhyming and rhythm was a bit off in places, but otherwise it's neat!

Pretty good! Keep it up!