mellophone7

Does he know? No. I only saw him once, but that glimpse started it all. Now I long to see him every day. Does he know I exist? Maybe. I ...

One other thing I forgot to mention. Try spacing your paragraphs out like you did with chapter 1. It makes it look more attractive to the reader.

I like how you incorporated the "no sense of time" concept. Just a couple things: Or is it that an African sunrise is more exotic and full of fiery? I ...

Cool. I like how you incorporated Europe and Africa and sort of melted them together in one story. If I tried to do that, I'd probably find it difficult. I ...

I like this! It's descriptive, and I can picture it perfectly in my head. :) Good job!

Wow. I really don't know anything about iPad doodling, but I'm just going to say that these look super cool! Especially the last one, with the flames. The first one ...

Wow. This is amazing. I wish I could do stuff like this!!!! Great job!! :)

Wow!!!!! OHMYGOODNESS, I wish I could draw as well as you could!!!!! Keep up the amazing work!!! :)

Wow. I love this! It totally caught my eye! I think it was mainly the green hair against the darker background. Great job!

Shadowmen. That thought roused me a bit, and I was able to keep up a brisk pace behind Nick as he pulled out his phone. “Who are you calling?” I ...

The next two weeks of school passed, very similar to the first day. I gradually grew more comfortable around Trey and his group of friends, but as I studied them, ...

My first day at Brookings High School. My mom had to be at work earlier than I had to be at school, so I drove myself. Lynn (my mom) worked ...

About two months ago, I lived in Baltimore, Maryland. Now, I live in a city that just became the fourth largest city in South Dakota- Brookings. Moving from an extremely ...

Instead of rewriting all of the previous comments and taking up more of your time than necessary, just refer back to the other users' comments, because I agree with every ...

Is there more to this? This would make a very, very good longer story, one that I would most definitely read! :) A few things: Try using italics when your ...