megefford

Of Singer and Song, Of Lover and Long, Of Memory Strong, We Sing. The Young and the Weak, Taught Strength in the Heat, The Fire of Dead, We Sing. Praise ...

Hey there. I like this. It sounds like there is something extra that you don't know about, something interesting. There is the number 4 missing though, in the count. I ...

The language is very interesting, and I like the truthfull structure a lot.

Very interesting use of rhyme, but restricting. If you were able to get what you wanted across, then great!

I really like the story- after I review this I am going to look for chapter 2. Okay just a few things jumped out at me: "There’s an empty seat ...

Psudiname- Thanks for the review! That helps a lot. I'm thinking of re-doing this one because it isn't as good as it can be. Thanks again for your help!

Beautiful poem. I'm sorry for your loss, it is obvious he was important to you.

Very breathy, very airy. I like it.

I like your emotional style of writing; it is very nice, neat and tidy with no fluff to fill it in. It sounds honest, and I like the structure- the ...

Lover's Cry Aching heart, within me, My aching heart bleeding. Weeping soul, inside me, My weeping soul helpless. Within me I cry for you, Within me I ache for you, ...

This is very unique, and a great story. Maybe go over the wording to make sure it says what you want it to say, because some of the language doesn't ...

The title Diary works, but if you aren't happy with it then maybe just let it sit in the back of your head and read in over from time to ...

The imagery of a 'soft silk noose' is impressive. It really causes the reader to keep reading and get into it.

Wow. I really hope you continue this- I am looking forward to reading more. You obviously know how to write very well, and have a good imagination.

I really like this- I want to keep reading! I think this will go far. Keep it up!