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I loved it! It was awesome! It had a nice beat to it.

hmmm I like it. It was kind of awkward, the part where you said "and you're wishing ot be dead" but I don't know how you can change that. And ...

Wait, so I copy all of this and bring it to chapter 1 and delete chapter 2?

thanks Renn! Man! I was a feature work one second and th enext out. -_-

AMAZING! I actually felt what the MC was feeling. I think what the last sentence is trying to say is well... um how do I put this? Ok the MC ...

WOW!!!!!!! that was good! And I agree with BeckeeRenae. It would be a great song. But some really good music writer will have to put it together, because I'm not ...

thanks everyone for the likes!

Chapter 1 Opal "But, Opal," said Violet, "Isn't that illegal?! She can't do that ...can she?" My best friend's silvery eyes were wide. She has blond hair and very pale ...

I thought she was going to jump in the ocean and drown herself, but then she hit her head against the rock, and I'm like, "Uh-oh." It was sad, but ...

Prologue “You’re Moira’s kid aren’t you?” that’s a sentence that never seems to die (I think the "that" should be capitalized;I think) . I get asked that all the time. ...

to melcally, roal, and ladypurple: Thanks for the comments! to roal: About the MoonDoon village thing,hehe. Um, yeah, some of my friends thinks it's kind of XD so yeah. But ...

Prologue (not in Opal's view) Some people don't really know where she came from. Some people thought she was from an island in the Pacific Ocean and managed to get ...

Hey I'm sorry. I never knew people commented my thing here. lol. To ladypurple: Thanks! I tried to be simple. I didn't want to be all "me, me me!" you ...

I loved it. Thought it was great. YOu were very descriptive and I was able to imagine everything. YOu seem to be good at rhyming which I'm not very good ...

That was really good. Awesomeness! But God forbid that we have a thrid world war. And I think that you have a good imagination, thinking of how a third world ...