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I don't see any direction with this poem and it's relatively obvious that you have writer's block (no offense). Someone told me once that I wrote a poem that was ...

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I enjoy this, especially the hint of enternal rhyme in the title itself. BUT, it kind of drags along when you start describing the game of cricket itself. A more ...

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This was good, but we don't know anything about the characters except what they are feeling or doing in these few moments you right about. You definitely were able to ...

Wow, this was really good. It has a super clear purpose and was written very creatively. You did a really good job of vocalizing what I think alot of people ...

This was good, but I almost felt like you should have been a little more sepcific. I especially like the last two lines, as I thought they were exceedingly clear. ...

I actually felt like this piece did flow really well. Your imagery was excellent and I feel like this was very well thought out. I understood everything that I felt ...

Sometimes I felt like your meter was off by a few beats, but other than that the content was superb and the meaning was conveyed clearly without overly expansive descriptions. ...

I really enjoyed this piece. I think its "than" rather than "then" in one of your lines towards the end. lol I thought your rythym was excellent and I felt ...

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Random edited pic of me hoping to look not like a twelve year old. lol

I like your ideas, but I don't think this poem allows them to come to fruition. It's rather confusing when you speak about the deaf hearing, the blind seeing, etc., ...

The milk is like "creative juices" or whatever and the children are the poems themselves. If there is nothing to nourish the children, then they will die, be torn apart, ...

I think the way you word things makes this a little difficult to understand. I had trouble understanding what "a fester" was or what "The Finisher" was supposed to be ...