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Jerome and I were walking hand and hand Four feet marching Two heads bobbing Jerome insisted we walk through the field A million stalks swaying High above our heads Hand ...

I am your critic I am your judge Mmmm, it tastes good Judgment does I’ll spread it on your toast If you spread it on mine I’m fine really Judgments ...

My name is Mary Gross. And I’m going to start with that because anything else I would say to you would be a lie. I think about this everyday, what ...

I realized the picture of us was sitting next to the bed and inhaled quickly. “Are you alright?”, David asked. I moved my gaze from the picture and onto his ...

You are definitely telling instead of showing what has happened to you here. That's my only qualm with this piece, and I struggle with that sometimes to. Overall it was ...

Mmmmm, this poem is really good. The idea of the apple and the man growing together is quite nice. :D I really have no suggestions. Gooooood work!

This is good, BUT I feel like you could have done sooooooo much more with this and expanded it so many directions. I really would love to see you take ...

Thanks for the comments. :D

This is interesting, only I never fully understand what your trying to say. It's implied, sure, but it's all sort of just skimming the surface. The line "'cos it's something ...

Uhm, yeah the spelling...

Thank you all again, I'm hoping to post the next part soon. :D

thanks, dear :D

I've read it and it was quite good!! :D

Well I hope you do, too! I'm sure you capable of wonderful writing! :DDDDDDD

Oh my God! This was amazing. It was so deep and sensual. I was really moved by this piece. My only qualm was the fact that at one point you ...