markvd

yeah, this is some really great writing. I think its important to convey as much as possible without saying a lot, or at least saying the right things and I ...

Twilight Tiger--I love your short, punches of verse. It really expands on the feeling and mood of the piece. I know what this is about from reading your profile, but ...

I liked your story, and I think it could be developed into something really great. Sometimes I had a difficult time following it. I would recommend going sentence by sentence ...

Very nice. I really enjoyed the description and its natural flow. I have two suggestions. First, in the beginning paragraph you start many sentences with "The." You may want some ...

also, that transition is the only major issue I see. Great use of description, its not overpowering, and at times, the story flows quite nicely. I would enjoy reading more ...

Great use of imagery. I like it that you don't use the cat's name or simply say "my cat." Its important that the reader gets a picture of what you're ...