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The heart is like a puzzle, Always scattered about . A space would be good here to break up the words and make each of these thoughts a separate stanza ...

OK, so this is a good base for a greater poem. The tone and emotion is good, but you're missing something... Organization. Right now, its a big mush that sounds ...

Wow! This is really good. I could sense the truth in these words, something that makes a poem great to read. I liked the metaphors and symbolism you used, especially ...

The first word that popped into my head when I read the first chapter... DANG! I only read the first chapter and knew it was a good start for a ...

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