magiclukehutch

I agree with Ares. And in the bit at the top, I just new that Jamie had murdered her father. But good work!

I don't think that ALL GIRLS SCHOOLS are ALL LESBIAN SCHOOLS. I don't have anything against lesbians but I do have stuff against gays. Sorry but I have. I have ...

What do u call that?

Hey, Luke! Cool story- you managed to put in a lot of action and a lot of different perspectives without making it clunky or boring. An interesting take, too, on ...

Thanks alot for your critique. I can't access the edited piece of this story because my laptop is broken and this PC I'm using won't let me download the story.

Hiya! You sound like a really nice lassie! New Zealand really is a nice place. I've seen adverts and shows about it on the telly. I'd love to go there ...

Sounds like the capital of Austria Rory

Being told to get out of my bed - Jack Muldoon What do you have for your breakfast?

Juice cos it's better for your teeth

Can I get your honest opinion please. Prologue The night was silent and nothing stirred. The silence to was too quiet, and in a way it was disturbing. You always ...

The girl was called Katy. Her friends were Bill and Charley This sounds like something a seven year old would write. I think you could write something better to improve ...

The was a soft, buzzing noise ahead, slowly getting louder and louder. Then , a shrieking siren wailed, piercing the peace of the nightime. Then there was a huge crash, ...

I don't really understand this piece of writing.

Your right. You could be writing about something that didn't even happen.

That was a good piece of work. Royboy pointed out the mistake. But well done! Keep up the good work! :)