lyrical_sunshine

Eeep! Snoink, this is lovely! I haven't finished it yet, but I'm on page 40 and it's so poignant of beautiful and i just LOVE it! the scene where the ...

10/10 ROTFLOL

7/10 Yay for Twilight.

I'm reading this book as we speak, but I'm only about twenty pages into it. So far it's making me depressed. HOW IN THE WORLD AM I EVER GOING TO ...

Oooh, Ellen Page would have been an excellent Bella... *sigh* Why don't they ask US to cast these kinds of movies?

6/10 I don't get it. Am I retarded?

8/10 pretty. :)

(twit, why in the world do you keep changing your name? i is so confused...) "Uh...people who trip a lot. Like me." ~Marc "Movies like License to Wed and Dan ...

change "I'd never known existed" to "I never knew existed." It's better grammar. :D other than that, this is great and I'm totally excited to read more. :)

Description, description, description! I was a little confused about the time period as well, and then when you mentioned the Empire, I assumed that it was sort of a fantasy ...

Will there be more? *is hopeful* It seemed like a short story and it had a good ending, but I wouldn't object to more. :D

Mostly the only thing I have to complain about is adverbs. Sometimes you use adverbs rather than strong action verbs, and generally strong verbs paint a picture better than adverbs ...

lol. good point, maybe i should go ask him for a demo... this story was inspired by a poem that I wrote called "Today" that was sort of metaphorical. it ...

*tackles Snoink and hugs her ferociously* I'm so sorry.

7/10 took me a minute to figure out what it was lol.