lyrical_sunshine

Ooh! You have lovely lovely description. It's refreshing. :D I don't understand what was going on with the bird and the cup. Can you explain that a little better? Was ...

Ick. I have to write an essay too...Tom Sawyer vs. Huck Finn. *sulks* I don't want to...

Marc: *indignatly* "No! Well...maybe a little." Jake: "Duh. I'm seventeen." Vanessa: "I don't think so..." Marc: "Don't you hate her?" Have you ever been kissed

Oh! There is a video lol. Unfortunately I cannot watch your video because my computer is ridiculously slow. But anyway, I still loved your story.

Showing, not telling! Who is this kid? What's the reflection in his eyes? What made his day so bad? Basically what I'm saying is that you need some serious description ...

Well, my characters are still being somewhat retarded, although most of them have settled back into their normal roles. Hatta is the peacekeeper again and Brand is still freaking out ...

*sigh* I love reading your work, twit. I couldn't find anything really wrong, but I do have a question. Why did you say Clover was a dog? "See what I ...

Just read your story Valor, and I really liked it! :D good luck on finding feedback! I know exactly how you feel. I kind of want my English teacher to ...

EEP! this is excellent! Just a few minor mistakes I saw, nothing big at all. Apparently, the man who said ‘you are what you choose to be’ was a liar. ...

Ooh, yay for more! okay, here we go. As for the first part, it made me cringe. Not because it was badly written but because COUNSELORS DON'T ACT LIKE THAT. ...

Sorry! i messed up this review, i'll give you a real one later!

*drools over the lovely story* eveyrone else pretty much got all the grammatical stuff, but I had to review anyway. My favorite perspectives: the sparrows, the nurse, and the intern. ...

Bethany A guy, strong, quiet, shy, passionate about injustice, scared of most girls, gets very very quiet when he's angry, somewhat socially awkward, smart, nice-looking, easily offended.

That's not a bad idea, espcially since my first draft was lost in the Black Hole (a.k.a our ancient computer.) It would be a good way to save backup copies ...

OOOPS!!! *is highly embarrassed* My bad, gyr, I thought I was rating Dynamo's sig. Apparently Sunny needs to pay more attention to which page she's on....*smacks forehead*. Your sig is ...