lyrical_sunshine

Wow, I really, really loved this! But I guess that's nothing new, since I love almost all your stuff, Jig. I loved the back and forth between past and present; ...

I agree with the comment about good imagery. It's a little simple, but the idea your trying to convey isn't simple at all. Maybe spice it up a little? Also, ...

"I always hoped that when I got older my crush on Ian would fade away, but here I am, fourteen years old and still trailing after him as if my ...

Immediate observations: 1. That's a lot of "A" names. Diversify a little. 2. First chapter of Harry Potter, with a different name. 3. No two-year-old looks like he's only a ...

Hey there emily! I love the premise, just because I LOVE Robin Hood retellings. However, I have to admit that I didn't read this whole thing. Try splitting this into ...

As usual, Twit, I have next to nothing to critique. I DID feel that the ending was a bit abrupt though. Gaspard is selling her family, and her reactions seem ...

CHAPTER 1. Song : Death and All His Friends-- Coldplay Harsh sunlight burned down on the state of Nevada, toasting more freckles onto my already spotted skin. (Love your verb ...

The movie is definitely not as good as the book - I had to sleep with the light on when I read the book - but it's a decent movie. ...

Marc: "So who's crazier - the characters who are talking to the author, or the author who is talking to the characters?"

Marc: "Angels and demons and drunken stupors, oh my!" Vanessa: "The world is a strange place." Marc: "It's even stranger when your book's being edited FOR THE FIFTH TIME." lyrical_sunshine: ...

Sweeet. 8, Rosey. Haha - it's actually not an allusion to plastic surgery, but I get why you would think that. They hate the fog.

"Do you dream that the world will know your name? Tell me your name." [i]Angels on the Moon[/] by Thriving Ivory. Great song. It's kind of my novel's theme. :)

Very pretty and lyrical, but personally I like something that grabs your attention right off the bat. Just my opinion, though. 6/10 Those pretty cocoa-colored eyes are worth roughly half ...

6. A little bit cliche, but still interesting. :) That pretty pair of cocoa-colored eyes is worth roughly half my tuition.

Sounds like it could either very literary or very creepy, horror-esque. :) I like it. RED INK