lyrical_sunshine

Um...yeah. What HR said. :P Also, in the Writer's Tip forum I compiled a list of websites that give A LOT of great advice on how to get published. I ...

Okay, I really liked this - your imagery and word choice was absolutely gorgeous. However, I'm still not quite sure what this poem is ABOUT. I sense there's some tragedy ...

I love these books so much. I bought City of Glass on the day it came out, and it didn't disappoint. :) I still think I liked the first too ...

Wow, this was so creepy and cool. I loved the voice of the little girl - and I also loved that it felt not quite right, you know? Like she ...

The first sentence was long and kind of a run-on - if you could split that into two sentences, it would be better. Okay, now onto my real reviews. :) ...

This was amazing and actually made me cry a little. But I do agree with Snoink - I'd like to hear more about the stories behind the scars, so we ...

Wow. I'm admittedly very, very bad at critiquing poetry, but I thought this was beautiful. I loved loved LOVED the lines "Sweet boy, good boy/ Just a boy who could ...

Kylan Really beautiful structure here. I loved that nothing was capitalized - I'm not sure why, but I think it just gave an extra feeling of chaos and confusion. I'm ...

Rascal: You've got a great start here, but I'm seeing some things you could definitely work on. 1. Characters. I'm not really feeling connected to your characters. They feel kind ...

Yeah. What Kara said. :P Seriously, that was so thorough I have nothing to add.

Hey Areida! This was beautiful, and you're definitely getting a gold star from me. :) But I have to admit it took me a little while to figure out the ...

Adorable! :D

First of all, your first and last lines were AWESOME. Perfect. Do not change them. :P That said, there were a few little errors that jumped out at me. Well, ...

You got a pretty thorough critique in the last two comments, so I second their edits. :) I really like the idea of having a character with CIPA, and that's ...

I would really, really like to see a story based on this poem. It makes me want to know more, and it seems like such a sweet story. I feel ...