lyrical_sunshine

hurray for allegories! i love allegories. C. S. Lewis and Tolkien, oh my! although Tolkien doesn't like to think of his stories as allegories. anyway. I would have thought that ...

"instead using his large, skilled vocal chords to project his voice to all the villagers." large and skilled is a bit of a weird way to describe vocal chords. and ...

Brad raised one eyebrow at the Peacekeeper. Somehow he had managed to infuse a good measure of sarcasm into the word 'charming,' so that it sounded quite the opposite of ...

Thank, sunshine, for all your great tips! Heh, yes, Brad's name. His real name is Bradken, but his friends horten it to Brad...does that make it any better? I just ...

9/10. it moves!!!! baroness ink, what was yours? i can't see it.

um...ok...your folio? lol. can you give me a link?

i agree with you about critiques. i like hearing how they liked the story before you explain how horrible my grammar is. i'll try and critique some of your things ...

hurray for allegories! i love allegories. C. S. Lewis and Tolkien, oh my! although Tolkien doesn't like to think of his stories as allegories. anyway. where is Scarab? after reading ...

i want to know! PLEAAAASEEE!!!! don't you love it when you have cool dreams that change EVERYTHING about your story? it's so exciting. like inspiration from heaven .

nice. sounds cool. a familiar idea but not cliche. good luck!

a book of Shel Silverstein poetry. haha. Out of the Black

i'd probably read it, but it sounds like it has the potential to become cliche. In the Water

Marc: My bad. Wrong number. Ha, you're studying? Sucks to be you. Later. Marc's answering machine: 'Sup, this is Marc, I'm ignoring your call right now, but if you leave ...

hmm...i thought Harry's dialogue was a little out of character. but that's really the only thing that bothered me. very nice.

awwww...i want more. very nice. i'm impressed. my eleven year old writing wasn't writing, it was sort of plaigerism - combinging C. S. Lewis and J. K. Rowling and Madeleine ...