lyrical_sunshine

There's some really beautiful imagery in this poem - such a sense of hope. :) I particularly love your first two stanzas. I am a little confused about the meaning ...

Wow, this is really, really beautiful. I love the imagery you've created - "waves strum in against the shore" and "leaves shrugging off the cold midnight dew." Awesome job. The ...

Hi there! You have some beautiful imagery here, and I love that; the problem I'm seeing is that I don't know exactly what you're trying to say. In a way ...

This was absolutely gorgeous. I have next to no criticism, except for this line, "(one day, when the sun subsides and the clouds are lit/ with a gold, absent of ...

Your writing her is great great GREAT, but like everyone else said - it was confusing. Kind of irritating. Because it's not just a piece of writing, it needs to ...

I love this analogy! So sweet and well thought out. I stumbled over this phrase a little: "Who doesn’t mind waiting that bit long to untie me." Did you mean, ...

This is some seriously beautiful writing. You've done a great, great job with her character - because I know she's a teenager, and even at certain places she talks like ...

One of my characters has synesthesia, and although I've done a lot of research on it, I'd really like to talk to someone who has it. Just so I know ...

I agree with Sureal - the Query Shark is a great great website. I'm also a member of a site called Absolute Write, and they have a "Share Your Work" ...

" What do you " What do you see , when you close your eyes ? Are you with me , [s]whatching[/s] (watching) the sunrise . What do you hear ...

Wow! There is some beautiful awesome imagery here! Great job! I think this is probably my favorite line: The walls packed by ice and tended by Men (is there a ...

Hey there! I really like where you're going with this; the rhythm and the cadence of the first couple lines was awesome. I could literally HEAR it, and I love ...

TL G-Wooster: Kristen Stewart was in Speak? I've read the book, and I've totally wanted to see the movie for forever now. Is it as good as the book is? ...

They're okay. Fun, upbeat music is good sometimes. :)

w00t TFK!!! Saw them in concert last fall, and they were incredible. :) Also got to see Pillar, Kutless, and Britt Nicole. :) They were all pretty awesome. (I now ...