lucyy

Hiya there, I have decided to review this little golden nugget of a story here :D . First off I will go through the whole thing, making [comments/suggestions] and/or edits ...

That is definitely an improvement, but try and lengthen it even further!! Build off from it... you could print it off, then write comments, and questions all around it, as ...

Hiya there, and first off welcome to YWS!! :D I have decided to review your piece for today (: --> Okay, this is very short and there isn't much for ...

Hiya, Pix :wink:. You told me you had posted something new so I just had to check it out. As the nit-picks have already been done, I'll give you my ...

Hiya, Oliv, I'm here to review this piece of work that looks a little lonely (: . So, here goes, I hope this helps you out!! =D [?] = I've ...

Yayy, I am the first to review *high fives*!! :D Anyway, I'm really excited to get on and read this chapter, so here I go... (: This one is shorter ...

** I am no longer using YWS but I'd like to say thank you to everyone who commented on my work and helped me to improve it - you guys ...

Hiya, Ash! Sorry I'm so late getting to this story, I've just now caught up and read the both of your chapters :D . Everyone has been through the nit-picks ...

I am here to give a short review for a short piece!! :D Now a few things you could do to improve: --Whilst you're describing what this woman is wearing, ...

Hi there, I am here to review, like you requested! :D My nit-picks: and eat us for dinner --Now, this sounds a slightly childish thing to say. I don't know ...

I'm glad I could help you out =D --Lucyy xx

Hi there, I was just passing, and I stumbled over this little piece looking a little lonely, so I have decided to review this for you!! (: My reviewing techniques ...

** I am no longer using YWS but I'd like to say thank you to everyone who commented on my work and helped me to improve it - you guys ...

Anyone at all...?? ^^

Hiya there, I saw that this was looking pretty lonely so I've decided to pop by and give you a review (: So, my reviewing techniques go as so: I ...