lucyy

I have enclosed a document with critiques in it. I hope it helps you out & if you have any questions to ask or anything then just PM me :) ...

You have really grabbed my attention & got me wanting to read more!! I think that this is really good & enjoyable & the only critiques I had in the ...

Really enjoying this story & it's getting more like a page-turner as you go on!! I've got a few pointers for you in this document & I hope it will ...

Having read your prologue I really enjoyed it & am off to read the next chapter. I've enclosed a document on what I think you could improve on. Hope it ...

Thank you both & i will take on board what you've both said & get to editing it right away!! & lol that's a very good point the both of ...

I don't really know what to say, but I do think you have the writing style to do a prologue & i think that that one is a good one ...

** I am no longer using YWS but I'd like to say thank you to everyone who commented on my work and helped me to improve it - you guys ...

"Are you ready, love?" I asked him, clutching his hand. Aidan, my blood father, was ready to drain his blood and replace it with ours. It was a painful process ...

I think that was pretty good, but i think it should be used as a middle of the story not the start if you get what i mean?? I think ...

Yep, they are definately the best books ever written & i can't wait for Breaking Dawn to come out!!! If you lot want to find out more about stephenie meyer ...

Thank you for all your replies .. im genuinely surprised i even got any!! hehe. sorry for the long time reply, but i've only just worked out how to reply ...

I am posting this to introduce myself as a new member as its what im supposed to do .. so here it is ... (i have prewarned you if you ...