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Wow, I really like this & am intrigued in which direction the story will go from here. I liked the shortness of this chapter & it didn’t seem rushed either, ...

I’m really enjoying this & I really can’t think of anything really major for improvement. The word document points out a few grammatical & wording errors & I also felt ...

Ooh, I’m really liking this!! There are a few grammatical & wording errors that I have pointed out in the document, but otherwise the emotions & thoughts & suspense are ...

This is really good & there’s lots of emotions from your MC which is great . Also, I like the way you are differing from past to present, it keeps ...

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Merry_Haven, Having read your preface to this, I have read over this & enclosed a document for you with critique etc. First of all: wow! You have a real good ...

Thank you kiley & i'll PM you when I post the the next chapter, I'm glad you're so intersted .. I seriously can't believe people are reading my stuff hehe ...

I quite liked this & thought it was a good start, but I think you need to add more scenery & thoughts & feelings & emotions etc, all that boring ...

Thank you both Merry_Haven & olivia1987uk I'm so pleased you like it & yep I will get on those alterations as soon as, I still haven't done the other ones ...

Thanks complicated 101, I'm glad you enjoyed it & i'll tidy up the bits that you pointed out & no worries about the lateness, because I'm a little late in ...

I really enjoyed this & the ending was the best part which really caught my attention!! You have a real knack for drawing in the readers attention, so much so ...

Thank you both for your comments & critique, i will take it all on board & start to edit it to improve it!! Also, there's a prologue to this story ...

I have enclosed this document, giving you a few pointers & because I'm too lazy I haven't had a look at the other comments, so I may be repeating what ...

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