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Hello again! Here to review! Nitpicks He didn’t s sound angry It seems that you have an extra 's' and I’ll take thirty from your wages Not really a nitpick, ...

It's sooo long. Oh well. I'm here to review this terrifyingly big piece! Nitpicks: subsequent days passed slow and drudgingly The way the sentence is phrased, I think slowly would ...

Hello! Here to review! Trying to keep the green room clear and all. Nitpicks about her freaks me out like half her face is stuck Arthur's cheeks flame, I half-heartedly ...

Hey there! I'm a bit late but welcome to YWS! I'm here to review! Nitpicks Time the the thread It seems you have an extra the there and some flats ...

Hey Jay! I'm here to review! And will smack you later. Nitpicks I was far to young to understand I think you are missing an 'o' here. After all, he ...

Hello! Here to review this piece. Nitpicks "sorry what?" "oh , okay. Well " those girls behind me "is that enough for "like you too?" All the bolded words should ...

I'm back yet again. So many chapters to review. *weakly reaches out* Nitpicks and walking out the door.” You seem to have an extra quotation mark at the end. Tell ...

Hello again! Here to review, again. Nitpicks ice pack on his brothers head Since this is describing his head, it'd be brother's head He had too . If taken out ...

Hey there! Here to review. Nitpicks Aaron was 24 years old You don't use the actual numbers when it comes to, well, numbers. So it would be twenty-four caught up ...

Nice to see you again, Forest. But honestly, what time is it for you?! Here to review! Nitpicks I guarantee that one, was the one. You don't really need that ...

Hey there! Here to review! Nitpicks I had remembered why came went out. This makes no sense to me. Maybe you can fix it? That's dream That is dream? we're ...

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This review courtesy of Hello there! Welcome to YWS! I'm going to be your reviewer today. Nitpicks cutthroat ' s sword. He brushed the ash off and sighed into the ...

This review courtesy of Here to review! I don't like things in the Green Room, it scares me. :D Nitpicks thinking for a little bit" You forgot to add an ...

Hi there! Here to review this one work. It won't do to keep it here past a month, will it? Nitpicks made quite a name Dark Brotherhood , so Shrouded ...