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Re: Risk ch 7
Hey, time to review. I only saw one nitpick. ~Our tongues moved together, we were insync.~ -Should ~insync~ be *in sync* Well that's all the nitpickings I have. Congrats! What ...
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Re: Risk ch 6
Hey, let's just start off with the nitpicking. Ok, end of nitpicking. I saw nothing to nitpick. Everyone below me did pick out a lot of the picking though. *just ...
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Re: Risk ch 5
Ok, time to review. First lets nitpick! I saw you spelled *magic* like ~mahgic~ again so I am guessing it is on purpose. Other than the usual no punctuation in ...
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Re: Risk ch 4
Hey, time to review. Let's start (as usual) with the nitpickings. ~Smoke and dust filled my lunges as I struggled for air.~ -Maybe it would be better if you changed ...
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Re: Risk ch. 3
Time to review and hello. Here is my nitpickings. ~“Just found out I got a bad grade on that Math test we had last week.”~ -You have Math capitalized. Well ...
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Re: Risk ch 2
You know the drill so hello! Time for nitpicking! ~I had Computer~ -Computer? Is that a name or should it be *a computer* I didn't see many nitpickings this time. ...
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Re: Risk ch.1
Hey, still reviewing. Nitpicking time. ~Their lack of technology really doesn't their in our favor.~ -What is ~doesn't their in~ Is it suppose to be *isn't in our favor* ~I ...
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Re: Risk
Hey, here to review. First let's start with the nitpicking. Well first of all I noticed when you had commas you put two of them. Maybe it would seem better ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: SPINE chapter 1
Ok, this is good. Nitpicking time! Here is some things that can be fixed. Let's start with some punctuation examples. ~Hey just look at the bright side.~ -Maybe *Hey, just ...
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Re: Howl - Chapter 5
Hey, here to review. I saw a nitpicking. It was a misspelling. ~It's a bit had to understand.~ Should ~had~ be *hard*? Now past the nitpicking, (the part I hate ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: Howl - Chapter 4
Hey I read this a long time ago but forgot to review it. I didn't see any nitpicks that didn't get covered by silver when I reread it. DUN DUN ...
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Re: Kyteline, Chapter One: Part Two
Hey I am here to review. (again) The only thing I seen that looked wrong to my eyes (of course they are tired from staring at this screen) was this. ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: Kyteline, Chapter One: Part One
Hey here to review! I didn't see anything wrong with it, and don't worry, I reread it to make sure. I'm not surprised though. You have written for so long ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: Vampiric; Chapter Seven
Hey Lu! Finally I am the first one to review your work. First dibbs! I reread it and saw no nitpicks. Good job Lu! Well off the nitpickings. I can't ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: Beauty and the Beast: Chapter I
Well I am here to review I'll do it by parts because it is a bit too long to do it all together PART 1 ---------------- ~It broke Bellden's heart ...
Dec 29, 2013