lost-my-mind

Clouds The door out of reach The black cloud swirling around him He saw nothing, nothing but him The black magnified his flaws His mind let them in Red pooled ...

The first part was awesome but the second part was too much of a jump for me. It just went back way too fast and it was too much information ...

The room became dark as the candles were blown out by the winters wind coming through the opened window. She lay still on the bed as her once golden hair ...

Fred is the long lost brother of nemo. You silly people when will you learn that the world is being run by mutant fish!

yay my first reply for this piece of writing and it only took a couple of months!! hehehe thanks!!

A little hard to get into at the beginning but once I started I couldn't stop, although I must admit I got a little confused but that made me want ...

This delightful tale has made my day. It is exceptionally witty and wonderful couldn't find any faults as I was snickering to much....I want more

it's got good potential but jumps around too much so the reader cant get involved...I'll text you more hehehe

oh!! I'm so sorry I was trying to figure out the correct restriction thing but I'm no good as I have read adult books since I was eight....I have no ...

His smile radiated love as if the obscenities hadn't been emitted from his mouth. "What’s wrong baby?" he purred while wiping the streams of tears from my face. "Nothing," I ...

very nice I applaud you for your darkness and emotions very much the style I like and a lot of people haven't been getting it but you.....wow keep it up!

This is a really cool piece of writing, I literally got tears in my eyes as I read it. It is relate-able which is good but the flow needs a ...

I really do love this piece of writing it is rather intriguing, but there is something about it that doesn't seem right but I can't put my foot on it ...

My favorite place is a place where no-one can find, it's a place like no other and it's all mine. The trees sprinkle magic over me as the rain falls. ...

I'm not sure where its going, so that's why I need help and I need an editor lol I'm totally useless at proof reading so any suggestions are much appreciated