lone-flower

I absolutely adore this. It's well-written, I'm intrigued by the charaters (plus, I really like their names), your use of language is colourful and wonderfully executed. I was particularly drawn ...

The whole piece is quite lovely :wink: I really like the transformation that took place, with the girl becoming the mute angel. Lovely idea. I don't really have much to ...

Azila has said pretty much everything I wanted to say. Except for these: You don’t know how lucky you are.” She said, looking enviously at my brother’s breeches and tunic. ...

Thanks a lot guys! :D

Beautiful! the launderette beats the secrets from the clothes, washes clandestine confessions from the sheets. she presses kimonos, who tell tales of scandals, rags that weep of poverty. This was ...

Maybe you should have made the dialogue and the narration sound a bit more like the same person. Her thoughts were too melancholy when compared to the dialogue, and the ...

I just thought about writing a poem for fun. Harsh criticisms are welcome :mrgreen: I dream of a world Where every thing's dead Where the heart does not beat And ...

I just couldn't finish this story. I'm sorry, but this just has too many errors. I'll name some of a few (they're the italicized ones): Counting off the ways we ...

I stared at the bubbles I'd blown into the sky. Translucent little mirrors, reflecting my blank face. I watched as the wind carried them up high. They rose higher, and ...

Whew, space your paragraphs out please! After you do that I will come back and review it, but the big chunk of text is overwhelming. :shock: :D *raises right hand ...

I know you're probably tired of other people's comments by now. Especially since we say almost the same thing over and over again. I'm afraid I'm going to have to ...

Once again, amazing! I can't wait for the third chapter. hehe. And to answer your questions: 1. I like your characters. Except for, like Alainna said, Samantha. I just don't ...

Hello!!! I almost didn't read this because it was so long, but I started reading it anyway and got really into it. I really like your writing style and your ...

Hi! I'm new here (obviously.) I hope that I would get to read lots of great works, and maybe even post some of my own. teehee. I'm only 14 years ...