lone-flower

I really liked this. The imagery is fantastic, I could see in my mind's eye what was going on and feel what the girl was feeling. The only line I ...

Great story! If there were any mistakes, I didn't notice. I was spellbound :shock: It's so sad. And it's so true. Keep writing, Ysa

Why so short? :(( Still, it was a very nice ending. You showed how the fat boy slowly began to not only dream of being thin, but believing he could ...

I really liked this story. But we have a rule saying you have to review two stories first before posting your own. Please try not to break it again. Also, ...

Oooh. Another vampire story :D. I liked this a lot. It's different from the others the way she's still living with her family and her friends accepting her for who ...

8/10 errrr......... I didn't really get it *sheepish grin*

Ok. I'm not the greatest poet alive (though I could possibly be the worst), but I love this poem! This is my favorite part: But you're breaking me down, And ...

OMG, I love this!! It's so easy to relate to, with your smooth and simple writing style. Here's some mistakes I noticed: So, I thought, “Oh, screw the milk. It ...

Very nice piece. I won't name the wrong things I'd found since they were most probably typos. I'm sure you'll be able to notice them after rereading the story. Really, ...

Very good poem from the other side of love. This deserves a gold star! :D

Nice work :D. The others have said pretty much everything I wanted to say. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

nice :D Love it.

Thanks for the comments! :D Conrad- The girl's the last person on earth. The other scenes are flashbacks. God (ooh. nice name :P) - Sadly, I'm too lazy to extend ...

The dust swirled around her, getting into her eyes. It should have hurt. Yet she was past caring. The park was filled with laughter and screams. She watched as children ...

Ermmmm... Her brother is still very much alive. The thing she'd lost was her hearing :D