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As soon as I stop breathing I melt somewhere in the distance spread like butter over stardust only to fall right through and tumble across the nowhere As soon as ...

I like this poem but there is something that I just can't grasp. I know this poem is supposed to draw you in with its mystery but I think it ...

To me, your poem was pure pleasure. It flows so smoothly and has unique play on imagery. Honestly, I don't think anything should be changed in it. It is perfect ...

I don't see a problem with advertising. They all are writing related and don't bother me.

hmm this confused me. So he's in a desert with dark skin. At first I thought he's in Africa, but then viajero is spanish. What about the girl? And then, ...

wow...simply beautiful. I did find a couple mistakes though. Four hours of heavy lifting, and she’s finished the stage of arrived. She waits for settles in, but she’s too hopeless ...

note* burqa is an arabic dress for women with long sleeves and that reaches the ancles. 3. Things Without Value The four o’clock alarm rang. Cooks scrambled to prepare breakfast ...

I did notice a few spelling and gramatical errors, and thankfully I don't have to correct them. It doesn't bother me much anyways. I like your introduction because it was ...

I like the different perspectives. The story is interesting to read and it flows good. My favourite part is the beautiful setting. I am looking forward to the continuation =)

Hi =) What do you mean by beginning? the note part? Yes you're right, the interpertation part needs a lot of editing. I didn't think that last sentence was that ...

Beauty entices; education enlightens. This is not in a particular place, or time. The only backdrop is that it’s during a war, in the Middle East where Arabic language is ...

I like this. Finally something new and fresh. =)

"Lina." Lily called. She admired a gentle expression of sleeping Celina. It wasn't just a happy dream she was seeing, but another side of her lately quick-tempered character. The lady ...

Thank you so much for reading and leaving a comment! I made the corrections that you suggested. Soon I will post the next part of this story. :)

wow this is a great biography! Witty and rich =)