lillizard

Dont mind lillizard, I think he's been taking grumpy pills You're taking grumpy pills! =P But unfortunately losing the grammar gives your poem an amateurish feel and makes it obvious ...

Very Nice poem! I would regularly go into critiquing it, but I noticed that everything I would say has already been said. So, I will just say that your poem ...

That is one depressing poem. Seriously, why are you writin about someone commiting suicide. Why don't you write about, like, someone smelling a flower or something. *sighs* ah, well, let's ...

AHHK!!! I'm sorry, but that wasn't a very good poem at all. The ryhming was forced, and the rythm was atrotious. You've really got to work more on your poetry ...

Very nice!!! I don't know if I'll be able to critisize anything in this poem... GAH!!! Can't...find....anythin to say bad things about! Oh, wait, I found something, although it really ...

*snores* Ah! Oh, what?!? I can't here you sonny! Speak up. p.s. Delete this.

Very nice poem. However there were a few flaws, although they really were kinda minor. And see, whether i care Take out the comma. It really takes away the flow. ...

Um, well, there are a couple things wrong with your poem. Firstly there's the rythm. Like mentioned earlier, the ryhming kinda' through the rythm off. I think that the poem ...

Nice job! The last stanza I thought was the strongest. A combination of nice ryhming, and rythm. However, as previously mentioned, the first stanza was not the best one to ...

Ah, but that's what chapter 4 is four. I mean, for.

Firstly, this poem is somewhat depressing. Secondly, I dont' have a lot of critiquing to do, for three lines. Ah, well, here goes. Under the pressure of a million eyes ...

There once lived some chosen people who had powers that normal people defined as..."unnatural". NO! Never say anything like that! Don't start a story by saying something like "Okay, there ...

I copied and pasted it from word perfect, meaning it showed up in this hideous, tragic form! AHHHH! I usually put a link into this after I add a new ...

This poem is awesome. Very nice metaphors, I really liked it. Also, like they said, the flow could use a boost. Just take out a couple of words here or ...

Hello? Anyone there? I'm knocking but nobody's answering. Ah, well...