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I started12 days late :P The bitter autumnal wind lapped the tears from the disheartened citizens of a small Italian town. The array of grand mountains capped with snow towered ...

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I do not like this line... The sky paints a painting of art. It's very repetitive...'paints a painting' and typically a painting IS art, so that seems repetitive as well. ...

Okay, lets get started... Firstly, I would like to say that i really liked your poem. However, there are some parts that are lacking in continuation. As bonafide previously pointed ...

Bond. Hey, it's short, sweet, and to the point. And, nowadays, whenever you hear that one word, unless you're in a bank, you're probobly thinking: Bond. James Bond. Of course, ...

Okay, let's get started. First off, welcome to YWS samarah. Secondly, you are only supposed to post a story or poem once a day. Although, two is okay... Anyway, here's ...

Ican, there is a balance. I'm sorry, but I can honestly say that your the meanest critiquer on this site. I mean I'm not a very good writer, and all, ...

Just FYI, this book is about this one guy, and, he does stuff, and the stuff is cool, and I really think that you should read this book, because it's ...

The poem is a boring, wannabe tear-jerker about how the narrator messed up her life. Don't listen to Incan. He's a little too harsh. Besides, he could find fault in ...

Thank you for critiquing this, Treecub. However, I made a pronunciation guide, although I haven't posted it yet. His name, with the little accent mark (yes, there is a reson ...

Nice story. However, the descriptions are a little overdone in my opinion (especially in the begining). Well, let's get started. The light’s illumination shone two very luster reflections which belo

I completely agree with everyone else. This poem is good, but doesn't have enough imagry, is not very exiting, and is very cliche. Now, on to the critiquing. Your no ...

Zank you. Zank you. Zank you very very much. I'm changing like half of my poem. But, bubbles, I think I'm still going to keep the: oh me, oh my. ...

Yeah. Well, bubbles said almost all of it. This really-no offence-of no intrest to the reader. If this is what you need to write to introduce yourself in YWS, then ...