lilgreendots

This was really good! The formatting made sense and it was interesting to read. I'm just curious how long are you planning to make this because if you want to ...

The story itself was great other than a few grammar mistakes. I didn't read to check for grammar mistakes but in the end of your story before Eli was going ...

I agree with UndertheGun, the way you used dialogue it would be better if you didn't have the main character write it like a journal or diary entry. Or if ...