lilgreendots

The story itself was great other than a few grammar mistakes. I didn't read to check for grammar mistakes but in the end of your story before Eli was going ...

Haha You have an awesome imagination :D

And I love the avvie Jas

Thanks for the warm welcome. Everyone here is so nice :P

Well, I was going to get little green dots, but everyone here seems to have moving avatars so I got a moving avvie too.:D

I agree with UndertheGun, the way you used dialogue it would be better if you didn't have the main character write it like a journal or diary entry. Or if ...

Hi!!! When I found this website a couple of weeks ago I couldn't wait to join. I went on it everyday and read stories. Well now I have and I ...