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Hi, I found one mistake where you put 'hug' instead of 'huge' here: I slithered as quickly as I could, but she had huge legs and hug feet, so she ...

She had noticed that she had just skipped the whole part of how she and her mother were kicked out of the royal house when she was five, almost thirty ...

Hi, this is pretty good. The only thing was that Kimberley Jones appears in the story too suddenly and inexplicably. I think it would be good if she was mentioned ...

There was only two things i noticed. I was painfully shy as a child, and I had never been able to completely rid of all those bad habits. It should ...

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Haha, i agree about the romantic short story forum, although there are some gems occasionally.

Hi, could you please review this: I've already had one good review but would also like one from someone who hasn't read the original. Just to get a different perspective. ...

sold them to super villains.

I just meant that she would have something telling her she has a son and not to kick him out of the house every day. Notes written in her handwriting ...

Yeah i agree with the reply above. Helping people won't make people like you. People don't always want or need to be helped. You could focus this in another way. ...

This is ok. What's missing in your story is hope, though. It's a bit depressing to read. The moral of the story seems to be: If life's too hard, kill ...

Hi, this is a good start. I think in a preface it's good to have mystery and uncertainty, but i always find it a bit annoying when something is just ...

The Burning World of Grass My world is burning. I can feel the heat radiating from the trees that were once my benevolent friends. Now, (unnecessary comma) they are vicious ...

I couldn't find any mistakes, so good job on that. I liked this. It's pleasant to read, and i like the whole tone of it; sad but sweet. I'm afraid ...

Hi, haven't got much to add. Just that you handled the story well and the MC's emotions really come across. I like the fact he is looking back on his ...