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Siento means sorry. And he hasn't walked 120 miles lol, he aims to reach Querto but passes through a town called Ibarra and that's where I left it off. Also ...

Hm, to be honest, I've seen this story so many times. I'm not saying that it wasn't good, besides the grammatical errors, but it's just simply the fact that this ...

The first paragraph is awesome, it really drew me in. I agree with the comment above on how I wasn't sure what was going on in the beginning though. Maybe ...

How old is the narrator supposed to be? Because in reality I don't think a young child would talk like this, but if she is older than that would make ...

I like how it starts in medias res, it grabs the reader. Good job, in this going to be a continuation?

This isn't completely done, but heres half. Joaquin pulls the warring rope and the bell of La Cienega Gasolina rings. He opens the screened door, and rests his arms on ...