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ITS LIGHTNING! (i could tell by the hair..) This is really good:D Though there is something about the face, I think it may be that the nose is a tiny ...

Personally, I dont have a problem with religion or religious people. I just wish others would respect those who are different. Not doing that sparks wars and debates that split ...

Also global warming is about just the planet warming.. its caled the enhanced greenhouse effect, and it means the cold parts get colder and the warm parts get warmer, and ...

What about habitats that coal mines destroy threatening species? Or the simple fact that we have the technology and resources to invest in sustainable and clean energy that won't run ...

hey, this is great:D it really rolls of.. (i would say tongue, but im not reading it aloud and i dont want you to think that) so yeah! it has ...

Her dainty, little hand lingered at the brass door handle, the other raised to her beating chest. She inhaled deeply before the rich timber door squeaked open, revealing the dim ...

Hey there! This is really good! The sentences were short, easy to read, and gave the story more of a sense of immedency. I think you've captured the view of ...

Hi there:) This is a pretty good short openning, I really liked the first sentence. But the second I got lost in the discription, and sadly not in a good ...

Chapter Two of my yet-to-be-named story:) This chapter is alot shorter than the first, but enjoy and feel free to fix any mistakes or suggest better ways for me to ...

hey there:P I love this story, the world and the concepts behind it. The only mistake I found in it was this bit; "He is wants something from you and ...

As I've said before; I love your writing. But this chapter does need to be edited. There are many missing fullstops and the punctuation needs to be improved, along with ...

I keep trying to guess what going to happen next but you always surprise me! :D You are so a better writer than I am. Once again; I LOVE YOUR ...

Oohhh this is cool! I love your story-telling style. I have so much trouble trying to convey things about the world my story takes place in and well, basically I ...

I also found this kind of funny:P It may have been talking about serious stuff, but it was written light-heartedly and had a personal feel about it that wasn't to ...

Hey there!:) I really like your idea here, reminds me of bits from The Hunger Games' Series. The writing is welldone, though there was a few little mistakes that everyone ...