laurendoak

This was really interesting, it caught my attention immediatly. I am curious to see what happens in the future. Will there be any sequels?

I see what you guys mean! I think that I will change it around a lot. And I mean a whole lot! Thank you for the critiques!

Please do not be afraid to critique harshly, since this one has been edited. But I just can't seem to find that copy anywhere. :?: :shock: :?

This story is really well written. It's something a lot of people can relate to! But,your character has no, well... character.