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Hi Love, Excellent once again. I hope that all the comments and critiques all inspired you to keep writing! Oh and Friday the 19th is a def go! Love, N

Hi, This story was really good, especially for a newbie. I usually go through and nit pick on things but I was too wrapped up. Perfect title too. If you ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this story. Just be sure to check for spelling mistakes! Love, N

Hi, I think this is excellent. Everyone had pretty much covered what I was going to say so I shall shower you with compliments and give you advice. I was ...

Hi, This was cute and had nice flow to it. I always loved Cinderella as a child, something seems so magical about having a boy finding your glass slipper then ...

Hi, I enjoyed this story, but you have a lot of dialogue going on. Maybe try starting off some sentences with description or something different. It is a tiny bit ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS. First off you should go do two reviews right away. It's sort of a rule, so that everyone gets an equal amount of reviews and all ...

Hi, I really liked this story, from what I read. :) I hope you post more! PM me if you need anything! Love, N

Hey Mander, Oh my god! Yes :] To clairfy, you are not giving up -- I will beat you if you do -- you are just taking a break and ...

Hi, I'm going to do a review for you today! All my edits, comments and concerns will be in bold :) He could feel the warmth of the sun on ...

Deleted. Thinking about publishing. Love, N

Hi, So I'm doing an essay for my sister about huckleberry finn. The question is "Define racism, easy enough, using the novel and research as evidence, debate whether Mark Twain ...

This need's a good bit of work so please rip it apart!

Thanks, I just finished editing it! Love, N

The Creature Silky cobwebs loom over the moon, as the Spiders stand, waiting. Nobody can see the leaf drop in a puddle making ripples in my stomach. The Spiders say ...