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This essay did not at all persuade me. If the school started later it would not give people and extra hour of sleep because most people would just stay up ...

I really liked this story, it was a good short read. I thought it was cool how she sprouted wing's i was expecting one of her legs to be gone! ...

Strawberry Wine Chapter One: Gum on Her Shoe. Rain spattered against the gold and blue train as it rattled along the rusty tracks. Lillian Winter lay with her head on ...

Wow, this story had a lot of emotion. One thing though i noticed is you switched from first person to third person point of view. So I took my pocket ...

Your right, this story is a bit strange but in a good way. I wish you had to put in more detail to what had happened though, we don't really ...

A Dance To Remember! "Mione, come on, Let me see, I bet you look great. Harry and Ron are already left. Come on!" Ginny said hitting the door with her ...

Hi, Reading this made me feel sad, since Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows was the last book. No offense but I hate when people write other endings for stories. ...

Hi, This wasn't really my type of story, but you had nice dialogue in it. I think it was a bit too choppy though, going from character to character, there ...

I'm not very good with critiques but I thought your story was very powerful like a lot of other people said. Also (a lot of people said this too) about ...

So, I liked the idea of the story but i think it should be in third person point of view not first, or leave it in first just change it ...

Hey, Thank-you so much for your pointers, I have already fixed them :) I think the part where Justin scolded Bridget I might leave in his name because if I ...

Okay, so I'm trying a new angle at writing the beginning of my novel. I started this off with dialogue, it is nowhere near done but I just want to ...

Hey, so this is the first part of my novel that I'm writing. I know there are two parts there, but I'm trying to decide which one is better. So ...

Okay, well that didn't really make sense to me, what was it?

Daddy's Little Girl We use to curl up on the couch and watch blues clues until the streetlights came on. He use to kiss my forehead good-night and tuck me ...