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Hi, I'm entering an excerpt from my novel into a contest for a boarding school. I need someone to review it for me and you did an excellent job on ...

Hi, I was thinking that too. I still don't know how to put what she's running from into words. Some of the poem is metophoric so I thought I might ...

Hi, Like olivia1987uk said, I would consider changing the names. Not both but just maybe one. Change the boy's name maybe. I really like the name Bella too. I really ...

Hi, Thank you all so much for the comments. They all helped me out a lot. It's hard to find mistakes or silly stuff in your own writing. I usually ...

Hi, So I've done some editing, and this is what I've come up with. I am still unsure about the end, I want a final statement like "My (blank) is ...

Hi, Excellent story. It had me fully interested the whole way. No one else has done a critique yet so here it goes. First you dry your hair I didn't ...

Hey Kels, I moved my letter to Historical Fiction. You should move yours too. I think its in the wrong place here :) If you need more editing done send ...

Hi, Is this a true story? If not then it should be in another section. Love, N

Hi, This always happens to me. I read a really great story and say "Oh, I can't wait to review this" when everyone has already helped that person with their ...

Hi, So you have a lot of comments on this and I would personally give you A. I really enjoyed your story and even though there were a couple mistakes ...

Hi, For some reason I always have trouble with tenses. I don't know why. I'll have on thing in past then in present. Is there anyway that you can tell? ...

Hi, Thank you for the comment. -- A little raunch keeps a story realistic, but this read more like a Playboy than a novel. Everyone's in their underwear, and boobs ...

The only thing I cane say is wow! I love it and I can defiantly see it in chapters some day. Love, N

Okay, I have edited yet again! Chapter one: Hot-dogs and wine “She did what with what?" April Fisher asked in a voice that suggested she had never heard something so ...

Hi, I see no one else has had the chance to critique so I will be the first. Here . Here is a city, the city is called Intercourse. A ...