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Re: Awake
this poem has a sophisticated tone. it is surreal and feels like it is a piece from a novel...which is a compliment just to let you know. it entails of ...
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Re: Thoughts of Murder
You are brilliant. with no rhyme scheme you still manage to make your lines flow together. this work is over-flowing woth emotion and a bitterness that is palpable. someone is ...
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Re: Begining Dream
I'll jump right into this. This poem was as powerful as it was simple. In the few lines you wrote you said quite a mouthful. you put new meaning to ...
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Re: 'Tonic for Silence'
Mandorelute, you have written a very interesting poem. The imagery you show creates a pleasently uncomfortable tone. I squirmed in my seat as i read this, yet could not bring ...
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Re: Revenge Cocktail
I would love to never see you again That smugness in your lips Raised eyebrow Acting like you know Watch your temptations And see if you don't get payback for ...
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Re: Porcelain Fall
Where did it go The feeling of abandon That euphoria I had been so accustomed to Everlasting acquiescent peace That calm before the storm Turmoil, that word unknown Now so ...
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Re: Stolen Emotion
This is the poem of a first love. A first love can seem like the only one. You grow and you change yet that person remains and you are constantly ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: Foreshame
thank you for the comments. more would be appreciated.
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: A Fate Worse Than Death
You were talking about the death within yourself weren't you? after reading this poem again i understood what you were trying to say. in losing yourself you couldn't understand what ...
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Re: Riding The Wings of Perfection
What an amazing warning this poem has to the young and hopeful and naive. Throughout your words there is Beautiful imagery. It comes off as sophisticated and protective. Scenes played ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Darkness' Release
I enjoy reading your poetry. I find your work to be a dark delight. This poem seems to be on a lighter note compared to your other work and although ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: A Suicide Note
this poem is brutally honest. it makes the reader feel ashamed and guilty for not being able to help this narrator. it makes the reader want to call/text there friends ...
May 31, 2010 -
Re: Little One
Thank you for the responses and suggestions. just a note, the poem is for my daughter...not about her. in the poem i am actually talking to her father, his strong ...
May 31, 2010 -
Re: Little One
[*]This poem is for my daughter.....enjoy![*] Your strong hands Cradling so softly and light A child of unpure blood Yet so pure a child A fire roaring within To warm ...
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Re: In the End
Indecisive and misunderstood So confusing the statements And ideas that are allowed to Be expelled from your unsettled mind Once my sweet now bitter ever-lasting Yet lasting as if all ...
May 31, 2010
