ladydark

Thank you.. I wrote it ages back, but still it amuses me, and amuses others.

I am King. Well, at least I should be. Twenty-five years ago, before I was born, this place was peaceful. Resources were plentiful, and there was no need to fight. ...

Preface Nobody knows why it happened, but happened it did. Two rival clans fighting for dominance of the mortal world stopped fighting. They were an immortal group, and for centuries ...

The wind scattered the petals across the road, and the trees were in full bloom. At first one saw a straight stretch of road; then the road curved gently out ...

wow. that like.. gave me shivers. Personally, I love things that have a lot of description, and right from the beginning the poem drew me in. I saw no faults, ...

5/10 um yeah lets go with not :P

okay. this is an... interesting poem to say the least. However, it doesn't quite flow right. I don't think it does at least. Some places can have words taken out, ...

(This is an epistolary from my writing class. Epistolary: series of journal entries between one or more people. :wink: ) September 13th, 2007 My dear pencil, We have known each ...

aye, it's v. catchy. Good rhyming, however.. why don't you expand? Like, who is that girl, why is she calling the person if the person themselves doesn't know them. Maybe ...

aye. you need to fix the grammar in this. you need a comma after me in the last line. "Then you threw it back at me, but all I said ...

6/10 nice

hehe, thanks. Not that great a writer. Left YWS for a while, didn't have things to post. But I guess I'm back again. I'll even try to edit stuff, but.. ...

A gust of wind whipped through the stone corridor, chilly and sinister. Stepping into a shadowy alcove, the couple vanished from sight. The knight leaned back against a wall as ...

Thank you. You were correct. It is fixed. Hopefully it is better now. After I wrote this, I created a second story to this, but not sure if to post ...

The day was warm, with the sun shining bright overhead. The sky was a priceless blue, with nary a cloud to damage its perfection. The young woman stood alone on ...