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la_lune28

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Clearwater

    To me you said, "the wisest" a bit too much, it got a bit repeditive and started to annoy me. You had a few typos and a couple mistakes, but ...

    Jun 24, 2007
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: "Double Dad" chapter 10

    It is a bit short, but I shouldn't say much, my chapter was super short also. You should add more thoughts and description, but other than that its great!

    Jun 24, 2007


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