la_lune28

I liked it a lot. I've always wanted to write a story about elves and how they have MAJOR problems with people, and you nailed it! I thought it was ...

To me you said, "the wisest" a bit too much, it got a bit repeditive and started to annoy me. You had a few typos and a couple mistakes, but ...

It is a bit short, but I shouldn't say much, my chapter was super short also. You should add more thoughts and description, but other than that its great!

Rhiine lay in a coma like state. She was in nothing, and everything, floating like a feather that dances in the wind. Flicking around from dream to dream, from thought ...

She lay in a dark room, shadows draped her still body. She listened to her own heavy breathing, deep and steady. She felt nothing, not the blankets beneath her, nor ...

Ghostly fingers flip the pages, Of our changing lives, For some those pages flip too fast, While some think they flip too slow, For very few, The pages flip, And ...