ksue

This is my first posting on this site. Well, my first fiction posting, I've done the required reviews, I promise :) Any and all comments are helpful! ******** Snow fell ...

I actually really liked separating the scenes from internal thoughts to external narrative. And I LOVED this story. It's really great. There is some switching of tenses, but I hardly ...

This was very sweet, lots of "Aw" moments. The one thing I will say is that in the beginning the pacing was great. It flowed but you got a chance ...

I like the idea of this story, and I think it had a lot of potential, but I think a lot of the emotion is missing. It feels really...clinical to ...