kris

You made use of some really beautiful metaphors and imagery..However, it did not have any rhythm, structure or all seemed a little bit mishmashed :/ It was also too long. ...

Are all evils inherent, as something waiting innate? Or be wickedness a skill, As something learnt by free will? Is the Spider who waits, patient, serene, compelled by its' nature ...

Over all i thought that this poem was OK. It seemed to vier toward being purple prose; which is all to easy to do to impress an audience, instead of ...

First and foremost i abore excessively long poetry. This is nion 3lines short of going into the fiction section. You expressed some wonderful ideas in this "poem" though. I'm really ...

Some very good imagery here, with some rather clever rhymes too. However as much as I'd love to prattle on with praise, I am not allowed. *grimaces* So let us ...

My first go at a sonnet here Alexandrian structure, with English scan - 12 lines, 10beats (half rhymes/rhymes on every other line) ----------------------- If evolution be false - a malice ...

Cold light reigned over the motionless room. She was always, softly spoken. Where the misbehaved daughter met her doom. Shiny teeth, a winning token. Motionlessly she lay on the bed ...

For your first ever poem, this is brilliant! I like it because you use a lot of very evocative imagery & you had a very confident structure to your piece. ...

Blue skies and green beneath, but what belies is beyond belief. I have no borders or check points. No flags or regalia. No monuments or visas. Nor does language define ...

Only slightly edited? cheeky so and so! :P that coconut picture has about 20filters on it hehehehe - i am afraid that to us mere mortals, this is a lot ...

Sup' Eimear? long time no speak eh? i hope you're ok. Anyway - "LET US, OUR BUSINESS COMMENSE!", to quote Moliere ;P Firstly I think your structure is inspired! it ...

fistly - oooomg that was long >< secondly - I really enjoyed it, coming from up'nerth i enjoyed some of the coloquialism that i am fermiliar with. There was a ...

Why is it that all the best things fade? Nothing stops time, no plan yet laid. Why do sakura fall at their very best? With them the joy of spring ...

There are two kinds of vampire these days. The undead and the "turned". The traditional undead, are reanimated corpses and therefor cannot become pregnant. The "turned" from modern culture, are ...

** Not really my best poem ever, but i have never tried writing a poem in this style before. So it's all just a bit of a case of trial ...