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The body only extracts oxygen from the air, that we breathe. It is taken into the lungs, where it is filtered by the alveoli and then absorbed into the blood ...

YAY! Punctuation! Seriously though, love. It has made the world of difference. I can follow the rhythm of the piece better now. They say his eyes are percing black and ...

I always try to make the magic in my worlds a little bit different, and less grand. My favorite scenario so far is this : Magicians, have no magic of ...

I'm from Southern Ireland (Eire)originally, and there is not a lot of difference in culture with the UK... The biggest differences are found in the colloquial terms, and also most ...

Prologue Morning in the city of Derc, and the dim light that had begun to climb over the looming mountains; bathed the city in a mellow gold. Only the city's' ...

Welcome member! You need to have more reviews, before you can post your own work. Anyway. A good subject matter, I guess most people have been there before. I thought ...

Well you certainly have a way with words. That's not in doubt, I don't think... However, I felt really unsettled by this poem. The syllables of some lines, were so ...

You seem reluctant to use punctuation. Why is this? If you don't, then you are going to loose a lot of readers. If there is no punctuation, then the readers ...

I liked this poem :D I think it is very cleverly written. It also has a very confident and well crafted metre; which is easy on the eye. Then it ...

Don't hate emos, they are a vital part of the eco-system :P

Over all I really liked this poem. You are certainly a very clever poet :D I found your choice of structure, really interesting and refreshing - it also gave the ...

I really enjoyed this poem. It had a sweet metre that was almost like a nursery rhyme - very innocent and pleasant. I do wish that you'd added some punctuation ...

I shall write you in verse, but my words will be plain. For I can find no lexis - arcane or cliché. No phrase can I find, to take your ...

Hey!! :D How do? Firstly, the feeling that this poem evoked within me was magical. The atmosphere was so rich, and the imagery so visceral! ARGH! amazing - beyond words. ...

I LOVED, LOVED, LOVED the metre of the piece. It had a definite beat; which was lovely. However it was somewhat spoiled by the lack of punctuation - other than ...