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Re: Dusk: Chapter 5
Chapter 5 – Just Another Day in Paradise Morning came quickly just like any other. Outside it was beautiful, the birds were singing, the sun was shining, people were leaving ...
Dec 25, 2011 -
Re: Dusk: Chapter 4
Chapter 4 – Home Sweet Home...Kinda On a regular day, during rush hour, it takes me a whopping hour and some change to get from Downtown LA to my apartment ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: Bloodlines #1: Chapter 2
Chapter 2 - Friends “You’re late!” yelled a cold voice as I skated through the metal gates of the small park close to the Westchester Bluffs. A park that was ...
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Bloodlines #1: Chapter 1
Chapter 1 - Welcome to My World I shot up in bed, screaming, sweat dripping down my forehead and into my eyes. “Oh my god” I cried out as I ...
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Dusk: Chapter 3
Chapter 3 - My Mystery Man Now traditionally, when one finds a bleeding man in the dark backroom of an art gallery, said person might: a) Run in terror, b)Scream ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: This Meadow
Yikes but wow. This poem is as deep as it is dark. I love the imagery for each line and your ability to tie a story, of why the meadow ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: Beautiful Flame
This is a beautiful. I love how you compare fire to a woman. The personification is a wonderful thing.
May 26, 2011 -
Re: Dusk: Chapter 2
Thank you StoryWeaver13 for your corrections. I do realize that grammar is not my best suit but I am glad that you are able to help me out on that. ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Dusk: Chapter 2
Chapter 2 - Blood Red Canvas I pressed my back to the cold steel of the door and took a couple of deep breaths. Trying ever so hard to steady ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Dusk: Chapter 2
Chapter 2 - Blood Red Canvas I pressed my back to the cold steel of the door and took a couple of deep breaths. Trying ever so hard to steady ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: The Haikus of The Periodic Table of Elements
I enjoyed these poems with glee. I love chemistry and it made me and my friends (who were reading over my shoulder) laugh. Hydrogen goes boom. Hehe...and so does uranium. ...
Mar 31, 2011 -
Re: [Insert witty title nobody else has thought of]
Hey Azila can you please review the prologue and first chapter of my novel "Dusk". See here [/url] Thanks ~koinu160~
Feb 15, 2011 -
Re: Dusk: Chapter 1
To IcyFlame: Thank you for your feedback on this chapter and I look forward to getting more as I continue on with it. I know that you have a few ...
Feb 13, 2011 -
Re: Dusk: Chapter 1
Chapter 1 - Breaking and Entering "I am really starting to hate Johnny’s guts right now," I growled bitterly under my breath. "It’s thanks to his ass that I have ...
Feb 11, 2011 -
Re: Wind
I love the imagery for this poem. You give the wind life in a way that many have tried and failed to do. When I read this poem I could ...
Feb 10, 2011