kogarasumaro143

*ouch* really people see suicide as an immediate solution to their problems. Nice! You really portray what is happening now. Positive Review: The flow of the poem is nice. I ...

ohhhh! Great! You really use the adjective "resource" to its level of usage. It really helps a lot in relaying messages to your reader. Just a little revisions and voala ...

@edgarallanpoe: jeee! thanks for the compliment.=)

*sigh* I don't like this poem. Even its good, the choice of right words is very important especially in poems where you relay more emotions to the readers comparing to ...

I wrote this poem last year. Hope you like it. Oh! A world with you is like such, Shining like a summer’s sunshine. Over mountains and plains it touched, Everything ...

Suggestion: Why not also write a short story version of this poem. It seems it can create a very good short story (and tell me if you make one). Reviews: ...

I agree... This is not a poem... It can be a narrative short story.. Hey devinj, Your second post which says this is two years old and you don't talk ...

This type of writing is very common. Still, its nice. It shows the cries of the long lost souls who can't find their way to paradise. Positive Review: Wonderful! Probably, ...

Fantastic. You really show to us the reality of how love feels when it is not time for you to love. Definitely, if you are not destined to that person, ...

Obvious! Next time let the reader follow the subject of you poem!

Positive Review: I like your attitude while writing the poem. It shows the weakest side of you and you are not ashamed to share it to everyone. Nice. Negative Review: ...

To kogarasumaro143,Changing the line you suggested does sound better, as I did aim to emphasise the fact that eyes are watching me. I think I may change it but I've ...

Be more precise next time in using words to describe what you want to describe. Be formal in every writing because writing is a formal way of expressing ones though ...

Another drink, Words spew out. Another smile to hide what's screaming to get out. Another free throw, and the walls come tumbling down. Another laugh to cover up the terrifying ...

Hey! What's up. I already read numerous poems about angel but this is my first time to read an angel being pictured out as a creature where one can lean ...