klotrox16

Well...it's actually about suicide. Being unhappy for so long, seeing only monotony until the sun sets-which never lasts long, beacause in the person'a mind nothing beautiful or real lasts long. ...

Extremely short, but SOOOOO CUUUUTE! I loved it! and thought it made perfect sense in an otherworldy-random way. Had kind of a curious toddler theme going on. The last line ...

While some of the end stanzas were a little choppy, this line flowed beautfifully. Yuor best one I only wanted the best for you, not this unrest for you. This ...

Well I think all-in-all your English paper is fine. I mean, I'm taking writing 121 right now so there's not much I can give you. But as for your poem...AWESOME! ...

Even though it was very short, it was cute, to say the least. I liked the consistent rhyming, though I think you should split up your stanzas a little more. ...

Dear to all beloved ones- I see the sun melt into fluff Headlights flash as dusk creeps in The fiery sky burn shadows on skyscrapers Washing out the atmosphere Devouring ...

First off, I think you're a wonderful descriptor. I felt the enigma of the character and the apprehension he felt, and the entire text had a nice, even flow. The ...

Well I loved the imagery and vivid use of adjectives, but I have a few concerns. First, in this sentence you misused a semicolon when it should've been a simple ...

This is a little dark, but very true, painful, real feelings. So be kind as far as content goes: One time I watched a chipmunk die All I did was ...

I think this was very original, although not quite my taste. I loved the imagery and how you perfectly used adjectives effectively in getting your message across. This stanza especially ...

Overall, the information is fine, but the syntax leaves much to be desired. Though your vocabulary is impressive, you overuse "The" as a sentence beginner. Try to find a more ...

Well I have to say, I like your repetition. How you switched between to repetitive verse endings to draw together the poem. It emphasized your point and built suspension. But ...

So, not to get all personal (well I suppose posting this in the first place is making it personal) but this is based on true thoughts, feelings, and (near) actions. ...

I love how this poem was sad and comedic at the same time. I liked how it was a paradox; it represented your mixed feelings about your friend moving, that ...

I love the symbolism of this poem and the personal depth you put into it. But I think you need to clarify this line: "The seconds fly by gone into ...