kiwiauthor_13

Hi. I really enjoyed this. I have to agree with KnightlyAngel. You could clean it up a little bit. But it is promising... keep up the good work.

Hey. thanks for reviewing guys. It really means alot. :D LaReine; thank you for picking up on all the grammar mistakes and all that. I don't really bother much when ...

Thanks so much for your critique... its really helped a lot..i haven't actually edited it yet cause i usually wait until i've finished the whole story to do that.... but ...

Thanks everyone for all your critiques... right now I'm not going to edit them because I like to edit my stories once I have finished them. I just find that ...

This is fairly good. It is a little hard to read without indents (new lines for dialogue) so I would suggest that you fix that up if you want anyone ...

This is really good. I really liked it... I could only spot a few grammar mistakes and such but other than that I really enjoyed it. You have a very ...