kitrosemon13

Good idea but bad use of punctuation, I'll try my best to do what I can to spruce this up a bit. I am lost within a dream, my hands ...

Short, to the point, and brilliant. Though maybe a comma or a period can be used in this ? In life pain is the promise of tomorrow, But it is ...

Well it seems like everyone above me got to all the corrections. But there is a few more. Punctuation is a key ingredient next to imagery. Both are important to ...

This was amazing, not much wrong with this at all. A few periods maybe or a comma here and there but other than that this was beautiful in a sick ...

10/10 as said above me. Wow. I'm sure you spent a while writing this but I loved it. It's like the bible in a personal viewers eyes. Keep writing!

Not much was wrong with this poem but the lack of punctuation. This can be fixed with ease. I wish I knew what you think when you look at me. ...

This is very good, I like the imagery here. You painted a picture of despair that I can relate to with temptation. But there were a few minor set backs. ...

I'm deserted and I'm fine, they don't care enough to read between the lines, let it burn me, kill me, broil me. I don't care if they call me crazy. ...

Just gonna get to the point here, rhyming was good but this confused me a bit. Shouldn't you have put that someone died in the beginning ? Or give some ...

This was really short but you got to the point, If there's a pencil, It's in my hand. If there's a notebook, It's in my lap. If there's an idea, ...

Long before I breathe my last breath, I look forward for a fight. It always happens like this, I always lose and never win. Why is this ? Can this ...

I liked the feeling of the poem but I feel at some parts you were trying the add rhyme but it just fell apart. I see the world through a ...

This is poetry! Just put it like this maybe: I'm not really sure if this is poetry or not, but someone told me to write about a golden knife. So, ...

This was interesting, only a few little nit picks: A rope, A gun, poison or knife. (Lower case the A on A gun.) Whatever was needed to take my life. ...

I honestly love your writing, I didn't find anything wrong with this much, just punctuation problems I'm sure you can figure out on your own. Keep up the good work ...