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Alex Carter Chapter 1 I can remember so clearly. I can hear her laugh, I can feel her heartbeat. I remember her but no one else does. I remember Jane. ...

I think that every poem has something unique about it and this, my dear friend, is unique. I liked the flow of it, even though some parts were choppy. This ...

It was probably confusing because you didn't read the other chapters. They will most likely answer your other questions.

Noise is all I hear... For the sake of my sanity I need you near, What once was my heart is now stone cold. I am not made of steel ...

This poem was really cute but there were a few errors that I saw straight on, If I could make music, (Comma) I would definitely start off with a kick ...

It seemed like now everything in my life was a lie, it was all wrong. Jane was forgotten, she was missed by only me. I cannot fathom a reason for ...

I like the concept of this poem but they have a few things you could adjust to make your poem flow more easily. In my head I see nothing but ...

This was well written but use commas! This can easily be fixed just so it can flow better instead of being choppy. She’s scared because she knows they’re there, But ...

I wasn't feeling this poem very much, it seemed to be lacking some type of emotion I was looking for. Other than horror or someone being scared. It seemed like ...

Welcome to YWS! I can tell that you are very new here and you have much to learn. More properly speaking is the use of commas in your poems, incorrect ...

Good work ! But there are some parts that broke the rhyming you were making it made it flow uneven. I am sorry, Mr. Worm you are so very busy. ...

This was sort of short and to the point, but the use in punctuation was poorly writing and so was the capitalization. But it was unique in a way and ...

Hmm, I was expecting this to be about love and I was right. Nothing is wrong with love songs or love poetry or love itself. But you don't want it ...

This was interesting but I felt it was lacking something. What are you truly speaking of ? Do you want it to be a mystery to the reader? Give it ...

Also I can see that you said that you wrote this like you wanted I was just showing how it could have looked. Keep writing!